Saturday, May 2, 2020

Sweet Insouciant Spring Dungaree Skirt


My grand grand- 
Standing all of seven- 
And-a-half grand- 
Daughter showing off 
Her blooming 

Outlandish new floral out- 
Fit with a flourish 
And an impish Look Papa! 
Now I really do have to watch 
Myself round honeybees, right?


2 comments:

  1. Charming, finely-tuned celebration of love and innocence.

    The poem is carefully composed, yet seems completely spontaneous, like the impish happy girl who knows her Papa loves her and trusts him so can be playful and at home.

    It all works together well, including the repetitions (three instances of "grand" and two instances of "out") that "do," with its emphasis, and the fine line breaks are a delight (for example, "Outlandish new floral out- / Fit with a flourish. . .": how beautifully that single line means several things: "Fit with a flourish"). The hyphens rush the lines over to the next ones, a breathless urgency to get this right.

    The poem captures a fleeting moment of love and joy.

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  2. And you captured its workings outlandishly well, as usual--many thanks!

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